View Full Version : Something wrong ?
05-21-2009, 06:05 AM
I have recently translated my web based game into english , but I observ a high bounce rate , so i'm wondering if the translation is not rude or innapropriate.
here is the website : http://xmrpg.com
Please tell me everything that seem wrong , thank you for your help :)
05-21-2009, 06:46 AM
I don't see anything rude/inappropriate, but there are minor grammatical errors:
Your character evolves in a medieval fantastic world and fights players from other races for free.
Here is a list from the principal preacticalities of the game (Main game features):
3D Online RPG.
Free RPG, entirely playable from your navigator(maybe you mean computer?).
A RPG that emphasizes cooperation but not competition.
Group strategy : Take part to (in) passsionate (fierce?)attacks with many other(multiple) players. (or say multi-player battles)
05-21-2009, 09:21 AM
Thank you audiogal81 for your corrections.
In fact , the game is playable directly from the browser ( maybe it's a better word here ) without downloading or installing anything.
I change the description to insist on this point , as i saw that most of english games are text based, maybe pple are not used to graphical browser games.
05-21-2009, 07:28 PM
Ah, vous êtes français ? C'expliquerait vos verbes. Ça va, je le verrai.
To start with, the copy still doesn't read like natural English. I'll post it again with a couple more corrections (though it's probably still better than my attempts at French):
Xm-Rpg is a (Massively Multiplayer Online [si vous voulez]) Role Playing Game (MMORPG) in which you play as a member of one of the four races. Your character evolves in a persistent, medieval, fantastic world and fights players from other races.
Main game features:
• 3D Online RPG
• Free Browser-Based RPG: no downloads, no plugins required
• A RPG that emphasizes cooperation, not competition
• Group strategy: take part in an exciting attack with multiple players
Yes, yes, I know prepositions in English are a pain.
Passionnant, if that were the original word, isn't translated as passionate: rather, exciting. False cognate.
Also, "visualize it bigger" should be "enlarge".
I think the bounces may come from you not quite selling it enough. I don't know, maybe actual images instead of blanks might help in the screenshot section?
05-22-2009, 06:47 PM
Oohh, here's the problem:
A RPG that emphasizes cooperation, not competition
What's the point? ;)
05-26-2009, 05:23 PM
Thank you CyanLight for your corrections.
It's weird that you can't see screenshots , this display nothing ? : http://xmrpg.com/screenshots/1_mini.png
And yes I'm french, your french is quite good ;)
Yes Fumigator , it's possible, i know it's unusual ;)
05-26-2009, 10:06 PM
I catch a glimpse of them when the page loads, but then they get hidden underneath. It's strange, because that image loads up fine.
05-26-2009, 10:22 PM
Can you tell me what browser you use ?
I use FF 3 and when clicking the link in your OP, I see what looks like a page. then I click a thumbnail (the same one as posted above) and it loads a new page with an image all over the top of it. when I click to go back I do not get back to the first page. That is likely why your bounce rate is high.
validate your code. I found 8 errors which are throwing off closing tags of your js as well.
05-26-2009, 11:43 PM
Code is now ok , it was valid but I don't check after last modifications.
In fact , it doesn't load a new page , it just make a layer appears, if you click again on the image , the layer will disappear.
But it's probably not user friendly, maybe if I add a close button on the right , it could help to understand ?
05-27-2009, 02:31 PM
A close button would probably be best.
I use IE8.
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